By condensing the lines,you have achieved something of a faster rhythm. In some ways,it makes me feel more anxious for the students, but I am curious about the final lines--is the die late the feeling, probably false, that the boys have but that the speaker knows is not true? Nice work!
I like your poem's rhythm.But won't we have vacation on May?
ReplyDeleteJackie,
ReplyDeleteBy condensing the lines,you have achieved something of a faster rhythm. In some ways,it makes me feel more anxious for the students, but I am curious about the final lines--is the die late the feeling, probably false, that the boys have but that the speaker knows is not true? Nice work!